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*sigh*
You know that materialism essay? The one I enjoyed writing? The one I thought I was going to do so well on?
Well.
It turns out I did pretty badly on it, as did the entire class. The highest grade was an 86, and I got an 84, along with quite a few other people, namely one of my guy friends, who I thought had a much weaker essay than I did. But apparently not. Both of our essays were weak, but for very different reasons.
My friend's essay was weak because it was poorly organized, rather vague, and had quite a few grammatical issues in it. And while my introduction was strong, I "fell down," as Mr. P put it, on backing up my claims. It was vague, too generalized, and did not have enough concrete support. My "diction" was great, my introduction made him excited to read it, but... I pretty much bombed, considering how well I thought I was going to do on the essay.
So I was quite upset. I thought for sure that I had done well on it, and to see all those red marks on a paper I was proud of just a few minutes ago was something that I wasn't quite ready to see. However, I soon realized that hey, it's constructive criticism, he has good points, and I'm determined to make my essay better than it was.
And if that means that I have to scrap everything but my introduction and start all over?
So be it.
(Which, you know, I've already pretty much decided I'm going to do that. I am going to get a good grade on this essay. Above a 95. I'm determined. Speaking of which, do any of you have any articles/statistics/etc. that would back up a claim saying materialism is bad for modern culture? Thanks a billion times if you do. It would help so much.)
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I know I said that I was probably going to finish Dust today, but I started reading All the Windwracked Stars, and wow, is that book amazing. I believe it's![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
matociquala's (sweet, I spelled her name right on the first try!) most recent book, and I adore it. Muire and Kasimir? Pure love. :)
So, needless to say, that'll probably be the next book I'll finish. And then I'll have to tell my friend (look above) that I'm done with it, because he wants to read it as well.
It's also kind of fun to have an author this good on your F-list, even though it's not mutual. Just reading her posts and seeing how utterly normal she is just... warms my heart, really. And her posts are always great to read. So are her books!
You know that materialism essay? The one I enjoyed writing? The one I thought I was going to do so well on?
Well.
It turns out I did pretty badly on it, as did the entire class. The highest grade was an 86, and I got an 84, along with quite a few other people, namely one of my guy friends, who I thought had a much weaker essay than I did. But apparently not. Both of our essays were weak, but for very different reasons.
My friend's essay was weak because it was poorly organized, rather vague, and had quite a few grammatical issues in it. And while my introduction was strong, I "fell down," as Mr. P put it, on backing up my claims. It was vague, too generalized, and did not have enough concrete support. My "diction" was great, my introduction made him excited to read it, but... I pretty much bombed, considering how well I thought I was going to do on the essay.
So I was quite upset. I thought for sure that I had done well on it, and to see all those red marks on a paper I was proud of just a few minutes ago was something that I wasn't quite ready to see. However, I soon realized that hey, it's constructive criticism, he has good points, and I'm determined to make my essay better than it was.
And if that means that I have to scrap everything but my introduction and start all over?
So be it.
(Which, you know, I've already pretty much decided I'm going to do that. I am going to get a good grade on this essay. Above a 95. I'm determined. Speaking of which, do any of you have any articles/statistics/etc. that would back up a claim saying materialism is bad for modern culture? Thanks a billion times if you do. It would help so much.)
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I know I said that I was probably going to finish Dust today, but I started reading All the Windwracked Stars, and wow, is that book amazing. I believe it's
matociquala's (sweet, I spelled her name right on the first try!) most recent book, and I adore it. Muire and Kasimir? Pure love. :)So, needless to say, that'll probably be the next book I'll finish. And then I'll have to tell my friend (look above) that I'm done with it, because he wants to read it as well.
It's also kind of fun to have an author this good on your F-list, even though it's not mutual. Just reading her posts and seeing how utterly normal she is just... warms my heart, really. And her posts are always great to read. So are her books!
